tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7521057314504818179.post170688330985310494..comments2011-09-19T19:04:20.358-07:00Comments on Amryn Scott: HarbingerWildscottkidshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05648906105174186722noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7521057314504818179.post-62589456486364354432009-10-29T14:36:34.856-07:002009-10-29T14:36:34.856-07:00erm... that was supposed to be "too many"...erm... that was supposed to be "too many".. :DJim and Beckyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01268871570371184396noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7521057314504818179.post-12244214300583262192009-10-29T14:35:24.676-07:002009-10-29T14:35:24.676-07:00I like this one a lot. However, I do have one bit ...I like this one a lot. However, I do have one bit of criticism... To many of your sentences start with the same word...it breaks up the rythmn of the paragraph. I once had an english teacher tell me that in a paragraph you should try to start each sentence with a different word. Other than that it's pretty dang good. :)Jim and Beckyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01268871570371184396noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7521057314504818179.post-75330634730384770302009-10-28T15:07:44.024-07:002009-10-28T15:07:44.024-07:00Great story! I am writing one right now. Been stru...Great story! I am writing one right now. Been struggling with turning the outline into actual chapters though. lol I have a few chapters down but they are all mainly character description.Susie Foohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02999372748905567994noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7521057314504818179.post-49533775826332633062009-10-28T11:21:01.260-07:002009-10-28T11:21:01.260-07:00i like this story. i find it very compelling and ...i like this story. i find it very compelling and i want to know what happens next.Ruthykinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03906507182384365998noreply@blogger.com